Here is a quick and dirty writing tip that will strengthen your writing.
In English, the word at the end of a sentence carries more weight or emphasis than the rest of the sentence. You can use that to your advantage in modifying tone.
Consider:
In the end, what you said didn’t matter.
It didn’t matter what you said in the end.
In the end, it didn’t matter what you said.
Do you pick up the subtle differences in meaning between these three sentences?
The first one feels a little angry, doesn’t it? And the third one feels a little softer? There’s a gulf of meaning between “what you said didn’t matter” (it’s not important!) and “it didn’t matter what you said” (the end result would’ve never changed).
Let’s try it again:
When her mother died, she couldn’t even cry.
She couldn’t even cry when her mother died.
That first example seems to kind of side with her, right? Whereas the second example seems to hold a little bit of judgment or accusation? The first phrase kind of seems to suggest that she was so sad she couldn’t cry, whereas the second kind of seems to suggest that she’s not sad and that’s the problem.
The effect is super subtle and very hard to put into words, but you’ll feel it when you’re reading something. Changing up the order of your sentences to shift the focus can have a huge effect on tone even when the exact same words are used.
In linguistics, this is referred to as “end focus,” and it’s a nightmare for ESL students because it’s so subtle and hard to explain. But a lot goes into it, and it’s a tool worth keeping in your pocket if you’re a creative writer or someone otherwise trying to create a specific effect with your words :)
“Nobody listens anymore. I can’t talk to the walls because they’re yelling at me, I can’t talk to my wife; she listens to the walls. I just want someone to hear what I have to say. And maybe if I talk long enough it’ll make sense. And I want you to teach me to understand what I read.”
